Mayhaps Quenyan would bring you delight.:
Nai Quenyava au tulyë alassë.:
Hí lartalwë, hí tirwë
Varyalya verië, Varyalya lunga
Calmangwa, cálë poicaín
Motangwa, taurë alcarin
Varyalya verië, Varyalya lunga
Tenn' Ambar-metta
Tenn' a·tellúmë tule Murmoiran
I do think prefer Elendil's ending.
Explanation:
Hí lartalwë, hí tirwë
(Lit.: Here we wait, Here we watch), larta- + -lwë, tir- + -lwë
Varyalya verië, Varyalya lunga
(Lit.: your defence, bold, your defence, grave) varyalë + -lya verië, lunga
Calmangwa, cálë poicaín
(Lit.: Our lamp, your light purest) calma -ngwa, cálë poica -inqua
Motangwa, taurë alcarin
(Lit.: Our toil, your forest glorious) móta- taurë -inqua
Varyalya verië, Varyalya lunga
(Lit.: Here we wait, Here we watch)
Tenn' Ambar-metta
(Lit.: 'Til Worlds Ending (From Elendil's Oath)) ambar
Alternative ending, drawing on Early Quenyan, and manouvering poetically:
Tenn' (h)a·tellúmë tule Murmoiran
(Lit.: Until from final dusk comes the eternalmost slumber) ha telu lúmë murmë oira -inqua